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Mobile phones are now carried by almost every teenager, and the question of whether they should be banned in schools has been debated for years. In my opinion, a complete ban is justified.
First, phones are known to distract students. Lessons are interrupted by notifications, and research suggests that pupils who are allowed to use their devices in class learn less. If phones were left in lockers, more attention would be given to teachers.
Second, a ban can protect pupils from online bullying and pressure. Messages are often sent and shared during break time, and victims are sometimes humiliated in front of the whole school.
Admittedly, phones can be useful tools: they allow quick research, and parents can be contacted in an emergency. However, schools can have emergency calls made from the office, and computers can be used for research.
To sum up, although a few benefits cannot be denied, the disadvantages are far greater. Schools should therefore have phones switched off and stored away during lessons, and students should be taught to use them responsibly outside class.
Claus de correcció: (1) postura clara amb contraargument; (2) passives variades i una construcció causativa (have emergency calls made, have phones switched off); (3) connectors i cohesió.